Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society?
It is certainly true that today
the
Correct article usage
apply
water
contamination is
represents Unnecessary verb
apply
bigget
threat to the environment and many individuals worry about Correct your spelling
biggest
bigger
this
issue. There are serveral
reasons behind Correct your spelling
several
water
pollution as well as
a
negative consequences on animal life and Correct article usage
apply
mankind
community.
To being with, The first Change noun form
mankind's
reasons
is Industrial Fix the agreement mistake
reason
revolution
is the main cause of Correct your spelling
Revolution
water
polluted
. To illustrates, Replace the word
pollution
increase
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an increase
the
number of factories for Change preposition
in the
production
of food and electricity can Add an article
the production
contributes
to Wrong verb form
contribute
water
pollution. This
because
they used Add a missing verb
is because
water
in manufacturing
process in order to Add an article
the manufacturing
cooling
or Change the verb
cool
heating
Replace the word
heat
process
and Correct article usage
the process
mixied
Correct your spelling
mix
water
with harmful chemicals
substances. As result a , they Change the noun form
chemical
releases
Change the verb form
release
this
contaminated water
to rivers , lakes ,and seass
without treatment. Correct your spelling
seas
seats
Second
reasonAdd an article
The second
A second
,
Add a missing verb
is, lack
lack
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the lack
awareness
among Change preposition
of awareness
people
about the value of water
, which means some people
discard their garbage into the
rivers and lakes , and Correct article usage
apply
this
rubbish contain
dangerous materials namaly, plastic, Change the verb form
contains
paper
.
Regarding Correct word choice
and paper
detrimental
impacts of Correct article usage
the detrimental
water
pollution on animals
and humans. First,
this
problem can leads
to extinct Change the verb form
lead
animals
,beucase
the Correct your spelling
because
animals
drinks the polluted water
. Therefore
, they struggle with diseases or even death. Similarity
, Replace the word
Similarly
people
who drinks
Change the verb form
drink
contaminted
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contaminated
water
can have serious diseases such
as,
Ebola, cancer, Remove the comma
apply
Malaria
. Correct word choice
and Malaria
Thus
, it have
Change the verb form
has
negative
effect the society ,because the life expectancy of Add an article
a negative
people
decrease
and and Correct subject-verb agreement
decreases
put
a Correct subject-verb agreement
puts
lot
pressure on healthcare, which contributes to Add the preposition
oflot
decline
the productivity among members of society and Correct article usage
a decline
produce
poor generations.
In conclusion, it seems to me that there are different reasons for Correct subject-verb agreement
produces
water
contamination,
and risky Remove the comma
apply
long term
effects on Add a hyphen
long-term
animals
as well as
humans.Submitted by faiz3177 on
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