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The table below gives information about UK independent films.

The table below gives information about UK independent films.
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The given table chart illustrates data about ten different independent
movies
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 released in the UK and Republic of Ireland by genre in 2012.
It is clear that
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 the most number of
releases
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 and percentages were Drama and
Documentary
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Documentaries
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while
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 Comedy was the most profitable from ticket sales.
Overall
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, Drama and
Documentary
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Documentaries
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 were the most released 35
movies
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 and 23.6
percent
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 of all
releases
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. Comedy
movies
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 released 26 and it is 17.6% of all
releases
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. Horror and thriller released similar
number
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numbers
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 14 and 13 respectively. It rated 9.5 and 8.8 in the total number of
releases
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. The rest of the
movies
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 under 10
releases
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while
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 Biopic released significantly low figures on
this
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 table chart.
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, the most profitable from
the
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ticket sales was Comedy, which made up 45.4%. The second most income from ticket sales was Horror which reached 20.2%
while
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Romance
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the Romance
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 figure was only 0.8% in the total.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words movies, releases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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