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The table illustrates the cost of three environmental projects for sustainable forestry in the next five years. The pie chart, on the other hand, depicts four sectors allocated in the project in the first year.

The table illustrates the cost of three environmental projects for sustainable forestry in the next five years. The pie chart, on the other hand, depicts four sectors allocated in the project in the first year.
#cost #three #projects #forestry #five #years #hand #four #sectors #project #first #year
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table
illustrate
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 the
amounted
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 of
money
 in
five
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a
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years
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five-year
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 projection that will be used for three environmental
projects
 for
sustainables
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sustainable
 forestry, measured
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in
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dollars
.
Moreover
, the pie chart
depict
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depicts
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 the expenditure which is expected to
spending
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be spent
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 for the first
year
 of the
projects
. It is easily seen that
money
spending
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spent
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 on
the
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projects
 in West America and Central America will
decreases
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graduallys
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gradually
while
 much more
money
 will be spent on
the
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apply
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project
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projects
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 in
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia during
this
periods
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period
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.
Accordion
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According
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the
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to the
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illustrateds
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illustrated
table, West Africa is forecast to use about 10.5
million
dollars
 in the first
year
,
however
,
money
that spends
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spent
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in
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this
 project is predicted to decrease in the three following years and reach 2.5
million
dollars
 in the fourth
year
.
Then
 it will
increased
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increase
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 to 3.5
million
dollars
 in the fifth
year
. Similar to the project in Central America,
this
projects
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project
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 is predicted to
spend
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cost
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 20
million
dollars
 in the first
year
, there will be
then
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apply
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a
substantially
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 decrease to 5
million
dollars
 in the third
year
 and will
be remained
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remain
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 stable until the fifth
year
.
On the other hand
,
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia is projected to
spends
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spend
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 30
million
dollars
 at the
beginnings
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beginning
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 of
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the give
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give
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given
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 period
,
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apply
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 and will
be
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apply
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then
decreased
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decrease
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 and
reached
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reach
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 20
million
dollars
 in the second
year
. After that, the expenditure is predicted to increase to 50
millions
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million
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 in the fourth and fifth years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, projects, dollars, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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