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The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The pie charts provide information about the proportion of
water
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usage
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 for several purposes,
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 the bar graph illustrates the amount of aquatic
usage
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 in various countries. Both are in the year 2000 and measured in percentages.
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, it is noticeable that agriculture used the most national
water
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 used for agriculture intake,
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 Canada was high for industrial
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 and India for agricultural
usage
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According to
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 the pie charts data, the amount of
water
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 was dominantly utilized for agricultural intake, which accounted for seven in ten, followed by industrial
usage
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 at nearly a quarter, more than three times higher than that of agriculture. Other than that, domestic purposes showed the least at just below one in ten, nearly three times lower than industrial intake. Turning to the bar charts data, Canada and India showed the most
water
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usage
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 than other countries. Canada used 80% of
water
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 for industrial purposes, eight times higher than New Zealand for the same category.
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, India used almost 100% of
water
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 for agricultural needs, which more than doubled compared to New Zealand at 44%.
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, for domestic
usage
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, New Zealand 46% of
water
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, which was the highest among all countries

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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