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some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that these days the negative side of the world. in other words, the bad taste of
life
 become more prevalent in nations. The question is, nowadays there are two segments of society, there are
people
 who see the problem in different aspects of human being
life
 should improve, meanwhile, others are considering
this
 topic it is normal and should individual adapting with it, which view is true? In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both
of
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views, plus draw my opinion. In terms of accepting, the theme of
life
 is
that
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how extent you can bear. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that. Daily we
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used to listening whether on
radio
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 or YouTube, the vast majority of successful
people
 there
coming
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from tough situations they lived in.
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, human beings can innovate
the
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hundreds of ways from nothing and stimulation the winner mentality.
On the other hand
, there are
people
 who prefer to provide a perfect atmosphere as much as they can.
Firstly
, we are reading regularly essays or news about the significant importance of self-peaceful .
In other words
, a couple of days ago
United
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 Kingdom emit statistics prove 74% of
people
 who have a shortage of income or
unsatisfactory
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 job have fewer issues on the psychological side. In conclusion,
although
 there are innumerable issues when you get
bad
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situation
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 in
life
, there is society
pay
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attention to
this
 field.
Therefore
, I believe you should pass the tough situation to reach
to
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your best version
to
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your greatest days so In my view I see
this
 problem
very
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 normal and part cannot wipe from
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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