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In recent times, economic growth has helped many become richer, both in developed and developing countries. However, those in developed countries are not as happy as they were in the past. Why is this? What can be learned from this?

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Nowadays, we cannot deny that the growth of the economy is a significant indicator in many
countries
. Economic development has been rapidly growing all around the globe, helping a large number of populations to become millionaires, both in developed and developing
countries
.
Nevertheless
, their feelings in developed
countries
 are not as good as expected when compared with the past. In
this
 essay, I will show some of the reasons and what can be learnt. First of all, because the strategy of corporations in the developed
countries
 needs lots of increasing production that makes most employees have to
work
 for long hours,
furthermore
 they have to
work
stress
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under stress
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 or pressure caused by the chief and their
work
.
This
 reason affects reducing good
emotion
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emotions
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 which leads to mental health problems and
burn out
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burnout
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 in the future.
For example
, the most common mental health problems
include
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including
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 depression, anxiety, stress and
bi-polar
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bipolar
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 disorder
that
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apply
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have been found in workers under pressure for many years.
Secondly
, earning high salaries is caused by economic development that leads to
the
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a
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 high cost of living.
Besides
, it makes more expensive foods and goods. At the same
time
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 people have to
work
 hard and arrange a budget to adequate more expensive spending.
This
 reason is another factor that can lead to a less happy level in
theirs
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their
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 life.
Consequently
, the economic progress illustrates
although
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that
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 money is becoming easy to earn. But it has negative results which are relevant to physical, mental health and high cost of living. These results are the top problem in developed
countries
 that reduce the happiness of populations.
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