Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: Say why you would like to go on the trip Suggest what you could do to help during the trip Ask other questions about the trip

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I have recently received the (a) letter from the

school

about requiring parents to participate in the

school

trip

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China for three

day

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days

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which will be held next month. Fortunately, I have a holiday and

available

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am available

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to go

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school

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a school

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trip

. I am

therefore

writing

this

letter to apply and would you please consider me to be a part of

this

tour. I am willing to join

this

tour,

this

is because I would like to spend

this

my leisure time with

son

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my son

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to travel and do many activities

together with

him. I

have

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also

plan to visit my best

friend’s

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Tommy hometown who is living in Peking, the central city of China.

According to

my Chinese language skill, I

able

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to assist

school

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the school

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by being a guide and translator during the

trip

Moreover

, I can find

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accommodation which is nice,

safety

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and cheapest. For

this

matter, I would like to know some detail about

this

tour especially the documents

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you require

for

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apply and how much money for the

trip

. I

hope fully

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you will allow me to be a part of

this

journey. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Wanvisa Jodnok

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
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15Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

200 words

4.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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The Greeting

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The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich are becoming richer, and the poor are getting even poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap?

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