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Cooking food is a waste of time in today’s hectic life. Fast food restaurant are helpful in modern living and it is less stressful. Do you agree or disagree.

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In
this
 modern era,
people
 prefer to buy
food
 from restaurants because it is more efficient and less stressful than cooking. I agree with
this
 issue, and
this
 essay will discuss
further
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it further
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.
To begin
 with, there are two reasons why individuals like to
order
meal
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meals
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 from
food
stall
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stalls
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.
Firstly
,
restaurant
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restaurants
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 make
food
 in an instant.
For example
, fast
food
restaurant
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restaurants
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such
 as McD, KFC, and Burger King can make breakfast in less than 5 minutes.
As a result
,
people
 who ordered their
food
 from
food
stall
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stalls
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 can go to
office
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the office
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on-time
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on time
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.
Secondly
, fast
food
restaurant
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restaurants
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 support online
order
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orders
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. A case in point, some
people
 may not have time to prepare their lunch because they have
hectic
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a hectic
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 life.
Therefore
, they tend to
order
food
 by
apps
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app
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 to save
their
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apply
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time and energy.
In addition
, there are two advantages
from
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to
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 ordering
food
 via
restaurant
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a restaurant
show examples
. First of all,
worker
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workers
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 might save money because they do not have to buy cooking devices. For
instances
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instance
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, cooking tools
such
 as
fridge
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fridges
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,
stove
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stoves
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, and stainless steel
foodware
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food ware
 are expensive. Second of all, employers could save their energy from the effort of making
food
. To illustrate,
citizen
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a citizen
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 can
order
 their dinner by gadget and can rest to the fullest.
Hence
,
folks’s
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folks’
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 currency and energy can
used
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be used
use
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to
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for
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 productive activity.
To conclude
,
people
 can change
cooking
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their cooking
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 activity by
order
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ordering
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 meals in
food
stall
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stalls
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 to face a
bussy
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busy
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 life anywhere.
People
 can save moments, potential, and
financial
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finances
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 without cooking. With the result that their hectic activity
are
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is
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 efficient.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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