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The best way to motivate employees is to increase their salaries. Do you agree with this statement? Are there any other ways to encourage employees to work more efficiently? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words

#employees #salaries #work
Nowadays the
work
 environment is more often filled with stressed people who are not enjoying their mansion. Many factors make
this
 unsatisfaction. Some people believe that the best way to motivate employees is to
increse
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increase
 their salaries. Of
course
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 it can help in several situations but I don't think the salary is the only factor to be solved. In our
society
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 every aspect of life became sadly connected to money. In fact, the standard of each family depends on the amount of money earned at
work
. That's why
an
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higher pay can motivate the workers and their will to wake up enthusiastic.
However
, there are some situations where money can't solve the bad conditions
which
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 they spend their time
commited
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committed
commitment
.
For
example
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 a receptionist can't be motivated to
work
 if the laptop she uses with the clients is slow and shabby.
Furthermore
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a
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low willpower is
also
 caused by a lack of hygiene or safety. In relation
with
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 what I mentioned early, there are other ways to make the quality of
work
 better and
satisfying
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more satisfying
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. It might be the case of clean offices and
well furnished
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 workplaces. A peaceful environment cheers the workers
as well as
kind
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 staff. To
work
 more efficiently people can
also
 find personal strategies
as
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 bringing a tasty snack or a little plant to decorate their spot. In conclusion,
a
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generous pay
at the end
 of the month is not the only relief
from
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the
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employees unmotivated. Bosses should encourage their partners to build together a nice and welcomed space where everyone feels safe and
in
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 peace in order to enjoy their day doing their job.
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