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You have recently ordered an item from the internet, but are not happy with the purchase. Write to the company. In your letter •Describe what you purchased •Explain why you are not happy with the purchase •Tell them what you would like them to do about the situation

#item #internet #purchase #company #•describe #•explain #•tell #situation
Dear Thien, I'm writing to complain about the other
an
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item from
internet
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the internet
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, but are not happy with the purchase. I
am
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apply
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bought
a
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some
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shoes
 but it is not the same
from
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on
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 the
internet
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Internet
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. I
want bought
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wanted to buy
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shoes
go
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to go
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 to the year-end party even, but
store
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the store
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send
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sent
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 me
shoes
 with leaking glue. In spite of it is
expense
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an expense
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 with
suppermarket
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supermarket
.
Therefore
 I
not
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am not
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 happy with the
purchse
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purchase
. In my
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mine,
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mine
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mind
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 it is very beautiful but not correct. Tell them what you would like them to do about the situation. I hope the store can help me change the new
shoes
. In case
store
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the store
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 can not change for me can feedback
with
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apply
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me
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. I trust
this
 matter will be resolved soon. Thank you. Yours faithfully, Minh Hiep
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logical structure
Ensure that your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should deal with a separate aspect of the task prompt. Start with an appropriate salutation, present the situation, describe the issues, offer solutions, and end with a polite closing.
single idea per paragraph
Use paragraphs to organize your thoughts clearly and logically. Keep one idea per paragraph, and use cohesive devices such as 'therefore' and 'despite' correctly to connect your ideas.
complete response
thoroughly address all three points in the task. Describe the purchase in more detail, explain the issue comprehensively, and specify what actions you want the company to take.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter. Address the recipient appropriately and avoid informal language or slang. Use full sentences and check for grammar and punctuation correctness.
greeting and closing
Make sure to include a proper greeting at the beginning and a suitable signing off at the end of your letter. Your current greeting and closing could be improved for a more formal tone and correct format.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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