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The graph gives information about the proportion of females and male in Australia in variation age groups who took daily exercise in 2010.

The graph gives information about the proportion of females and male in Australia in variation age groups who took daily exercise in 2010.
The graph shows the proportion of Australian males and females who took physical activities regularly, and it is divided into six different
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 groups from 15 to over 65 in 2010. In general, the highest percentage of
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 was among 15 to 24-year-olds, and the 45-54
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 was the highest for Y.
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, it is noticeable that the rate of Y was higher than
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 in all
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 groups but the youngest. The lowest
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 of Y who did exercise was 47.7%. Their proportion inclined steadily by increasing
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 and reached the top at 45 to 54
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 by 53.3%. Above that
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, it went down to 47.1% in the highest
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 bracket. In the lowest
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category
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,
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 participation was higher than any other
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, by 52.8%.
This
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 was
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 the only
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 which has a higher
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 proportion than Y who regularly exercise. Mid-thirty to 44
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group
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 showed the lowest, at 39.5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, x, group, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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