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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given plans illustrate the information on the Grange Park section is varied between 1920 and now.
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, it can be apparent that the development of novel facilities, buildings and constructions at different times. First of all, before altering to a big rose
garden
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 at the moment, the fountain was located in the middle of the park.
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, there were three rose gardens at
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first time that it was planted in many discipline directions, but later have only maintained at the north-west of the centre site, demolishing another
garden
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 was in the opposite direction, changing the
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garden
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 at the north-east of the café in today.
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 to these seats, it is set at the immense niches in
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 area in 1920,
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 relocating surrounds the biggest
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 at present.
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, there were diverse buildings modified that the stage for musicians, a pond for water plants and a glasshouse have turned respectively into an amphitheatre for concerts, a children’s play area and a water feature
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 of the period.
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, the entrance car park is constructed underground the
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 time.
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