The chart illustrates the percentage of male and female executives in seven different types of profession across the UK in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary. Write at least 150 words.

The chart illustrates the percentage of male and female executives in seven different types of profession across the UK in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary. Write at least 150 words.
The given bar chart provided the proportion of executive
professionals
by gender in seven different careers in the Uk in 2007.
Overall
, the number of male executives in Construction was the highest
while
the proportion of female executives in Teaching was the highest,
However
, in half of the occupations given, both genders were approximately equally represented. Teaching and Therapists shared the highest proportion among female executives , it accounted for 90 and 80, respectively.
In contrast
, the number of female
professionals
in Construction careers was the lowest among the six others, it was only 10 compared to the male
professionals
at 90. The scientist's career was approximately equally represented proportions, male
professionals
accounted for 60
while
females accounted for 40.
On the other hand
, a gap of 10 was seen between the rations of Male and female who worked in the field of Advertising and law, in which Male was higher in Advertising and Female was higher in another. Journalism was equally represented at 50 in both genders.
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