Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packagingof goods.Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is widely acknowledged that packaging every
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effect on
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the consumption
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of natural resources.
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and providers. In my opinion, the prior responsibilities are held by customers and they should prefer alternative items which are not provided with packages.
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to compare both views and will provide examples to arrive at
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conclusion. It is widely acknowledged that packaging every
goods
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good
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has had
a
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an
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effect on
consumption
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the consumption
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of natural resources.
This
may be caused by
costumers
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customers
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and providers. In my opinion, the prior responsibility is held by
customer
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the customer
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and they should prefer alternative items which are not provided with packages.
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aim
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aims
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to compare both views and will provide examples to arrive at
reasoned
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a reasoned
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conclusion.
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