Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centres. Do you think the advantage outweigh the disadvantages?

Few
indivisuals
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individuals
believe that it would be best for bigger
firm
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and
industry
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industries
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to migrate to rural
areas
, and
that is
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of advantages than drawbacks.
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both views with reason and examples.
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with, the major advantage
regading
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regarding
on price, If people have a firm
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rural
areas
than urban
areas
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spend
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huge
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amount on industry development and on place,
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an industries
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industries
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area, where more than 5 companies are developed,
this
place got them into
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amount.
Furthermore
,
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individuals
get facilities
such
as water
,
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and
transport
into another country by ship.
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areas
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ocean, so if
firm
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required
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to
transport
thier
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their
product or chemical
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another nations
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,
so
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they can easily
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.
On the other hand
, outside of urban places having few drawbacks,
that is
about
transport
the
prodcut
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product
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city
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by truck, For illustrates, Urban
areas
and rural
areas
having long distance, so they would
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extra cost for
this
delivery service. To be concluded,
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to rural
areas
is better than urban
areas
for firms and industries, as we saw in
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that more
benifts
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benefits
than disadvantages.
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