The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise in imformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisonswhere relevant
This
diagram shows the process treat rain
Correct your spelling
rainwater
water
to make drinking water
and arrange
to Wrong verb form
arranging
resisdent
in Correct your spelling
residents
Australian
town.
Add an article
an Australian
Overall
, you can see all houses in Australian town
have Fix the agreement mistake
towns
drain
to make sure when is raining, rain Correct article usage
a drain
water
will throught
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through
throughout
this
drain all collected. When all the rain
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rainwater
water
assembled, they
processed to have fresh, clean Correct pronoun usage
it
water
by to filtered
the impurities, Change the form of the verb
filter
dush
. After Correct word choice
and dush
filtered
, our drinking Add a missing verb
being filtered
water
moved
to storage where to reserve the fresh, clean Add a missing verb
was moved
water
. Then
, the drinking water
will filter its
again to make sure there was no Correct pronoun usage
apply
chemical
in Fix the agreement mistake
chemicals
drinking
Correct article usage
the drinking
water
. After all, the drinking water
completed
and arrange Add a missing verb
was completed
to
all the Change preposition
for
resisdent
in town to Correct your spelling
residents
resident
used
.Add a missing verb
be used
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