Many countries want to host international sports event, while other countries think that hosting sports events has more problems than benefits.

Many nations have a desire to be a host of the world sports event, but other nations think that hosting
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championship has more issues than
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advantages.
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both
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why I personally believe that international events
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more beneficial effects than
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problems. On the one hand, the government fully realize that an international event obviously
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much money. It is used to build and
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repair some facilities to support
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events, like the stadium, house of athletes, public mass
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transportation
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for supporters and tourists.
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the
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worldwide
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some advertising and campaign
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the local citizens to support.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • National pride
  • Fosters
  • International relations
  • Bolsters
  • Economic gains
  • Economic burden
  • Long-term debt
  • Infrastructure improvements
  • Cultural exchange
  • Mutual understanding
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon footprint
  • Commercialization
  • Gentrification
  • Displacing
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