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Some employees are giving more value on hiring people with good scial skills apart from good qualifications, to what extent do you agree or disagree

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These days, in some companies employees' priorities have changed, and their tendency to employ
people
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 is significantly based on communication abilities rather than knowing if they are qualified enough or not. I disagree more with
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 statement, and in
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 essay, I will discuss some of the reasons. The first point is that they might not gave the adequate knowledge related to their profession.
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, not being fully aware of your task and
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 what should be done in some urgent situations, can put the interest and profit of the organization at risk.
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, it may have inevitable impressions which can not be forgivable. Another point is an increasing rate of unemployed eligible
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 who deserves some high positions. What I mean is, these communities have the greatest experience and knowledge which they have gained in years.
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, they are considered as the educated society a company may require to establish its basis.
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, hiring an employee with strong social skills can be beneficial in some businesses. Stock markets,
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, may need these skilled
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 to reach an agreement with foreign or domestic shareholders. What is more, signing lucrative contracts can change the economy of a country which is the result of the organizations' election. In conclusion,
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 it is argued that choosing individual skills is a main aspect of hiring
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, I believe there should be a rational balance between these two points, and knowledge and other privileges ought
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