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1. The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

1. The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
percentage
 of
adultswith
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adults with
 different
age
 groups using the
internet
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Internet
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 between
2003
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the 2003
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 and 2006 time period in Great Britain.
Overall
, the highest
percentage
 of
internet
 usage
waslshown
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was shown
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the
 youngest
age
 group between 16-24 years. Apart from that, over 65 aged people had the least interest in using
internet
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the internet
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 showing least number of
percentage
. The main users of
internet
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the internet
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 were
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young
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between
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the 16-24age
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16-24age
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16-24 age
 group.In 2003 and 2004 the shared same
percentage
 of 80% and rose
into
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 the peak of 100% in 2005. But
then
 they declined nearly
into
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to
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 90% in 2006. Both
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the 25
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-44 and 45-54 aged groups showed an upward trend between 2003 and 2006.
Although
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 two
age
 groups showed some fluctuations,
overall
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the overall
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 trend was upward. In 25-
44
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 there was a gradual growth from 50% in 2003 and 80% in 2006.
Age
 45-54
age
 group showed
same
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the same
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 gradual growth from 60% to 80% between 2003 and 2006.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • adults
  • age groups
  • Internet
  • daily users
  • increase
  • significantly
  • highest
  • lowest
  • rise
  • contrast
  • smallest
  • followed closely by
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