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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below reports
datas
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data
 from
last
years
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year
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. It illustrated the percentage of the time spent by UK men and women without an occupation during their day.
Furthermore
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 the selection shown separates the activity made in the morning and in the afternoon too. We can notice that both
gender
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genders
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 enjoy spending the same amount of hours in bed at the
beginnig
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beginning
 of their day.
Instead
, they
differee
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differ
of
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from
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 the 30% by housework. After
midday
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,midday
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 most of the time
by
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apply
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men is arranged by watching TV.
In contrast
, women still prefer going for housework. Hobbies
such
 as playing
sport
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sports
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, reading, decorating and gardening are appreciated more by boys during the hours after
the
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apply
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sunrise. In conclusion, unemployed men and women
seems
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 to be more active straight after they woke up. In
UK
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the UK
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 habits which people without a job prefer don't
required
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require
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 to go out
while
 during the afternoon is more likely that these individuals leave their
home
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homes
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 for visiting,
for instance
, friends or relatives.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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