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Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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In most parts of the world, there is a fixed
age
 to get retire, mid 60's
for instance
. Most
people
 deny
this
 and believe that certain jobs require an early
retirement
. I completely agree with
this
 notion and will explain why and which type of workers need early
time
 off in
this
 essay
further
. Those who favour early
retirement
 believe that it gives quality
time
 for their own life and family.
People
 are working for companies which results in no
time
 for family or to pursue their interests.
Moreover
, some
people
 work far away from their household and barely get
time
 off to spend with their loved ones. Having
retirement
 at an early
age
 could lead to enjoyment of their lives with families and friends. In my opinion, individuals who work in the army, mines, and long-route truck drivers deserve an early
retirement
. In the army,
people
 live far away from their families, in mines
people
 deal with harmful substances every day that could result in serious diseases, and
lastly
 truck drivers for long hours every day. if
such
 workers retired at an early
age
this
 will be helpful for both individuals and society as the risks associated with the jobs would get decreased and individually they will enjoy their lives.
To conclude
,
this
 is unfair to have the same
age
 of
retirement
 for almost all workers. Some jobs like army, mines, and drivers deserve an early
retirement
.
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