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Should schools cancel Summer vacation? Why? Why not?

Summer
vacation
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 is the time when all
students
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 look forward to having fun doing a variety of activities. Some people,
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, argue that summer
vacation
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 should be
canceled
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 since many teenagers waste their time during it
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 of gaining valuable experience that will help them earn money or learn new skills.
In contrast
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, others believe that
vacation
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 is a reward for
students
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' hard work, whether they spend it playing, sleeping, or doing something useful.
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, In
this
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 paragraph, we will discuss the two opinions deeply.
Firstly
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, on the one hand, many people suggest
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 the summer
vacation
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due to
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 the time-wasting that many
students
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 used to do
instead
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 of gaining valuable experience,
such
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 as joining an internship, working within a research group, or volunteering in any sector.
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,
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 it or compelling them to participate in any useful activity is critical.
On the other hand
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, others believe that
vacation
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 is the
students
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' reward for working hard for months, and they have the choice to spend it doing any things
for example
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, playing games, hanging out with friends, or just laying down.
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,
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 shouldn't be considered an option. In conclusion,
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 it is a controversial topic. Personally, I believe that
students
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 should do whatever they want during their
vacation
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, despite the fact that spending it wisely will benefit them in the long run.

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