Some people believe using modern technology (digital photographs, blogs) is the best way to record and remember important personal events. Others think the traditional method (making photo albums, writing diaries) is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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revolutionised
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every moment of life and some inhabitants consider it the most accurate,
whereas
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believe conventional methods in the physical form were way better. In my perspective, old pictures or writings make us feel more connected. On the one hand,
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innovations including digital cameras, mobile phones
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other gadgets
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illusion
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of
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life, which could be enjoyed after years too.
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future. In simple words, it could not be lost or
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conveniently
accessed utilising applications at any time.
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, many inhabitants around the globe are taking advantage of it by blogging.
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, social sites are the platform, where
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of vloggers post
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talent,
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experience
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entertaining
content and
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money.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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