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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and report the main features nad make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and report the main features nad make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps reveal the layout of Ryemouth village in 1995 and how it looks now.
Overall
, the villages become more urbanized with recreational facilities
while
 replacing some natural features. The place where farmland and forest park used to be
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1995 became a golf field with two tennis
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 to its south.
In addition
, a new car park was constructed eastward of the hotel at the junction of two main roads
while
 the cafe southward of it remained unchanged. The fishing port was completely demolished and no more activities can be carried out in the sea now.
Besides
, apartments have been constructed along the
road
 parallel to the sea, replacing the fish market in that area
while
 the shops along that
road
 now feature restaurants. To the east of the housing area, a new
road
 was constructed from the west of the north-west
road
. New houses are built along that new
road
whereas
 the previous housing area remained unchanged.
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