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⁷Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

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There are opposing views about whether
students
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 are entitled to choose their
university
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 major.
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 some people assert that
students
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 should be free to choose their major at the
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, others argue
university
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students
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 should be obliged to
study
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 courses related to science and technology. Both groups present compelling reasons for justifying their assertion, which will be elaborated on in
this
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 essay. On the one hand, some people believe that it is against the freedom to force
students
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 to learn specific subjects.
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, if authorities deprived
students
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 of their freedom of choice, they participate in courses for which they neither have the talent nor enthusiasm. As a direct result, the
students
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 will not show admirable performance in these majors. Take a student who is passionate about art
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; being forced to
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 engineering, he is more probable to withdraw before completing the course.
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, others think that the government should spend the budget on the nation's priority. Since they believe that art and social science is not the priority of developing countries, they advocate the government allocate the budget to teaching science-related courses to
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. A good illustration of
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 is African countries which do not have access to healthy water and electricity; in these countries, it is recommended to force
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 to
study
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 technology in universities so that they can be helpful to their society.
To sum up
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, both groups bring rational justifications to support their idea.
While
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 many individuals believe that
students
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 are entitled to choose which subject is suitable for them to
study
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, others believe that
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 the scarcity of government budgets in some parts of the world, it is better to force
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students
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 to learn practical subjects like science and technology.
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