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Countries shd spend money on trains rather than new roads. Do you agree or disagree?

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Public transports are very important for citizens and nations , some
people
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 argue that the government budget should be spent on
trains
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 rather than
roads
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 , I disagree because in my opinion even though they are useful and may seem convenient they don'
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 serve all places .
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 , most
people
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 use
roads
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 whether
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by their personal vehicles, bus or taxi , some
roads
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 are even used by cyclists , their maintenance is vital for user's safety
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 when a lane isn'
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 well maintained especially if it has holes that can result in dangerous accidents
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 it can deteriorate
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's véhicules ,
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 by preserving
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 countries preserve their citizen's safety as well .
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 ,
trains
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 don'
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 serve every place,
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even though
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even though
 there are numerous
trains
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 around the world , there'll l are many isolated sites that are only reachable by road ,
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obviously countries can'
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 implement railway
roads
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 everywhere in the country since it is more expensive and requires more time than building a highway
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 individuals prefer using
roads
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 more frequently Than
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 because they cannot go into each district and neighbourhood oppositely to other public transport
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 as buses and taxi
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 when using a road
people
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 can choose to take personnel or public transport , depending on their budget since
trains
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 are costly , As result
trains
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 don'
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 go everywhere and are more expensive Than other public transport
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 , in my opinion despite the importance of
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 and railways ,
roads
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 remain more popular and are way more convenient for individuals
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 they are better able to serve each place in the country

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