You have seen an advertisement for a part time job welcoming visitors to your town. Write to the recruiters. In your letter •Explain why you want the job • Describe why you would be a good person for the role • Describe any relevant experience you may have

Dear Recruit
manager
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, I am writing
this
letter to apply for a
part
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part-time
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time
job
about welcoming visitors. I would like to get
this
job
, because I have free
time
as the
time
you require in advertising, and I believe that I can be
a
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in a
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good role with my
experiences
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to do
this
job
.
Fristly
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Firstly
, when I read the advertisement, I felt the
job
is really interesting
,
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because I could meet and talk with many people.
Furthermore
, I just
quited
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quit
quoted
my current
job
, so I have
a
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plenty of
time
in
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on
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that days.
Thus
, I can focus on
this
role totally.
In addition
, I thought that I am a good person at welcoming, and I like to talk and take care of others.
Additionally
, I
was be
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a consultant
sales
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before, I need to meet and explain to many clients a day,
this
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and this
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also
relevant to
this
job
.
Therefore
, I believe that I can do good
it
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apply
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with my experiences. I am looking forward to receiving your reply soon. Yours faithfully, Joseph Hien
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