The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods in the UK.

The given map displays the changes in the past 57 years in Coastal Town which is

also

known as the

Pentland

. By comparing the 1950 and 2007 maps of

Pentland

certain developments are noteworthy. It can be observed that a lot of people moved to Coastal Town by 2007 as the infrastructure and facilities became accessible for them in

Pentland

Overall

the main structure of the town with one main

road

with two bisecting roads remained similar.

Whereas

, the industrial area of 1950 located in the northwest region of the map was replaced with a park, swimming pool, multi-storey car parking and some shops in 2007. The car park on the east side of the

road

was removed and towards the right side of the eastern

road

, many new apartments and shops were constructed. Towards the southeast side of the

Pentland

was mainly the grassland in 1950, but with time many houses were built in that corner. The rest of the grassland area of the southwest corner of

Pentland

was converted into a cinema. ,

Also

the sea was developed into Yacht Marina covered by a half-circled

road

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2Word repetition
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3 paragraphs

187 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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Topic Vocabulary:

Consumption
Trends
Peak times
Declines
Plateaus
Age groups
Lifestyle changes
Food delivery apps
Health implications
Obesity
Heart diseases
Diabetes
Public sector
Private sector
Healthier menu options
Public health campaigns
Regulation changes

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