The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
The graph illustrates information about two different countries for a certain period of time
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both renting and buying houses.
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, from 1918 to 2001, owned accommodations increased through the period,
while
rented ones decreased during these decades. It can clearly be seen that, until the year
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1971,
where
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both reached the same figures of 50
percent
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, house rentals were the most popular trend, starting the period with nearly 80
percent
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. Meanwhile, from 1918 to 1971, house owning started to gain popularity and
begun
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to gradually rise from approximately 22 to 50
percent
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as
it
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was referred
earlier
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. It is noticeable that from 1981 forward there was a change in the percentages until 2001
whereas
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owned homes went up to numbers around 70
percent
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,
in contrast
to home rentals that went down to 30
percent
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. In the
last
decade, another fact worth noticing is the reverse tendency of both households where
it is clear that
rentals had climbed
while
the other category started to decline.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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