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The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
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The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in
grams
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 per
week
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), in the UK from 1970 to 1990. The illustration presents the expenditures in fast food snacks in
grams
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 per person per
week
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 in the UK for 20 years. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is clear to see that people chose to buy fish and chips over a period of two decades. Between 1970 and 1980, fish and chips and hamburgers had an increase in sales
however
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pizza
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 was on a decreasing trend. The former went up from approximately 90
grams
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/
week
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 and rocketed to around 150 and the latter from roughly 20
grams
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/
week
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 rose to around 90.
In contrast
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,
pizza
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 had a significant decline from 300
grams
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/
week
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 to an estimation of around 210
grams
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/
week
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. After ten years, the two trending snacks have been bought increasingly for more than three times their values in 1980; 500
grams
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/
week
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 and approximately 290g/wk, respectively.
On the other hand
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,
pizza
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 constantly remained at 210g/wk in 1990. In conclusion,
although
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 there was a big rise in the consumption of
pizza
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 and hamburgers, sales of fish and chips decreased.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, week, pizza with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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