When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A large number of people consider that

money

is

crucial

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a crucial

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thing for choosing a

job

. From my point of view, I totally disagree with

this

statement and in

this

essay

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I will explain

in

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further

with two reasons.

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with,

amount

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the amount

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of payment from

job

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a job

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is definitely considered essential for

jobseekers

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. To put it another way, we all have basic needs,

such

as housing, food, bill, education and health which are connected deeply with

wage

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.

However

, satisfaction and environment which is

boss

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and workmate from work

is

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are

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much more important compared to

the

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income. Since working will continue

in

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for

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long

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a long

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time,

for

this

reason

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money

can't cover all disadvantages

from

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of

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laboring

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labouring

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which is hard to endure. Burnout syndrome,

for instance

, is

biggest

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the biggest

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drawback

for

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of

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miserable

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working environment. Almost 15

percent

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per cent

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of humankind, who are working, are facing

with

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the symptom

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symptom

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symptoms

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of burnout syndrome, namely

drained

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all of the time, feeling insufficient and

also

detached from

world

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the world

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. Another reason

of

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opposing the idea that

money

is

first

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consideration

,

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is personal development. To be more precise, if mankind

choose

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job

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a job

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because of

own

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satisfaction, in the future, skill and knowledge will undoubtedly improve

with

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in

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own

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their own

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field.

As a consequence

, great capability from

profession

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the profession

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will come

together with

considerable

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a considerable

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amount of income,

for

this

reason, there is no need to choose work with high-income in the first. To illustrate

this

idea,

J.K.Rowling

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J.K. Rowling

who is

author

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of "Harry Potter" can work as a reduction in some

newspaper

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, in spite of

this

, she

had

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chose

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being

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to be

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an author,

eventually

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it gave her huge

honor

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honour

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and

money

. In conclusion,

money

is

important

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an important

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consideration to choose

job

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a job

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,

nevertheless

, there are

another

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strong factors compared to

wage

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. Working with

great

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a great

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leader and friendly

colleague

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furthermore

, pleasure from

job

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the job

a job

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will enhance knowledge and practice,

eventually

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,eventually

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we can earn enough.