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Some experts suggest people a method to solve the environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuels and all vehicles. To what extent do you agree with this point? and make comparisons where relevant.

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Nowadays,
time
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 are very difficult
everything
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and everything
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 is getting expensive
due to
fuel
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the fuel
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increase
.
Their
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 are no other options except to put the price up. By
increase
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increasing
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 the cost it will help develop a better environment with
less
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fewer
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 problems though it will make things worse and tough
to
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for
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 poor people even
medium
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the medium
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 one. Only the rich will remain with their riches. People won't be able to afford groceries, accommodation, fees for children, clothes etc
due to
 the
increase
. People will struggle
of
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 transportation since it will be expensive.
While
 it will boost the system the infrastructure will develop creating employment
to
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 the nation. The roads will be fixed since they will be money to do
such
. I totally agree with the
increase
on
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 fuel prices and vehicles cause it will create employment and maintenance the infrastructure.
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