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Some people think that people should be given right use of fresh water as they like. Others believe governments should control toughly over the use of fresh water. Discuss both view and give your own opinion

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The issue of whether
people
 can
use
 fresh
water
 as they like or
it
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if it
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 is
controled
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controlled
 by the government is open to debate.
This
 essay will discuss both views and present my outlook. There are some
people
hold
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belief
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the belief
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 that being able to
use
 fresh
water
,
clean
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and clean
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water
 is a human’s basic necessity.
Firstly
, it is believed that
water
 is a fundamental
contributing
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contribution
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 to
human’s
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human
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 well-being to sustain basic activities
such
 as cooking. If
people
 were not to get an adequate amount of
water
 used, their human
right
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rights
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 would have been violated.
Secondly
,
people
 have varying needs to
use
water
 so restricting the amount of
water
 used,
it
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apply
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can be advantageous for those who have to
use
 heavy
water
.
For example
, farming activities are one of
a
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the
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 work that
need
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 to
use
 heavy
water
.
On the other hand
, others are of the opinion of introducing regulations on using
water
 can have undeniable positive effects.
To begin
 with, it is obvious that
water
 is a scarce resource, so if individuals are free to
use
water
 at their own discretion, the resource can
depletion
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deplete
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 faster and unequal distribution of
water
.
Besides
,
people
 in some countries who have
difficult
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difficulty
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to access
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water
 can receive less
as
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than
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people
 in other countries who have used
water
 extravagantly. In conclusion, there are opposing views about using
water
. I hold
belief
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the belief
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 that the amount of
water
is
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should not restrict,
nevertheless
,
people
 should
use
 it
reasonable
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 and
saved
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save
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.
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