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The line graph illustrates the proportion of inhabitants of different generations going to the cinema once a month or more in a citizen of Europe between 2000 and 2011.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of inhabitants of different generations going to the cinema once a month or more in a citizen of Europe between 2000 and 2011.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of inhabitants of different generations going to the cinema once a month or more in a citizen of Europe between 2000 and 2011. In general,
it is clear that
 the most of
people
 who went
the
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 movie
theater
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increasing
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during
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over
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 11
years
. At the beginning of
period
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, the percentage of citizens
low
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was low
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 at under 20
percent
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per cent
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. In 2000, the proportion of the offspring who go to
cinema
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the cinema
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 was 10
percent
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per cent
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,
a
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half as much as that of the
people
 from 25 to 30
years
 old. There was a slight growth to under 25
percent
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 in both
of
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the children and the young in 2007. From 2007 to 2011, the
figure
of
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 children and young
people
 rose sharply to 30
percent
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. There was
2
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percent
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per cent
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of
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the
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proportion of senior citizens
whereas
 the
figure
 for
people
 from 15 to 24
years
 old stood at 15
percent
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 in 2000. A stable remain was seen in the percentage of
people
 from 35 or over through the 7
years
 period until 2008 the
figure
 for that went up gradually.
Besides
, the percentage of teenagers who go
the
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 cinema rose dramatically to a peak of 55
percent
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per cent
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 in 2010. At 50
percent
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per cent
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, the
figure
 for
people
 from 15 to 24 who go
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to movie
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movie
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movies
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 was 5
time
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times
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 that of senior citizens in 2011.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years, percent, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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