The graph shows the changes in the percentage of people who go to the movies once a month by age group in a European country from 2000 to 2011.

The graph shows the changes in the percentage of people who go to the movies once a month by age group in a European country from 2000 to 2011.
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The graph shows the changes in the percentage of
people
who go to the movies once a
month
by age group in a European country from 2000 to 2011.
Overall
, we can see the highest proportion of
people
aged 15-24 who go to the cinema once a
month
and those aged 35 and over the lowest.
In addition
, the figures for all age groups increased over the given time period. In 2000, the 15 to
24 year old
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age group who went to the cinema once a
month
accounted for 15%.
This
number tripled over the next five and a half years and continued to grow until 2011 to more than 50%. Meanwhile, only about 3% of
people
aged 35 and over go to the cinema at least once a
month
.
This
number
also
increased gradually over the years and reached approximately 13% in 2011. Very similar trends can be seen for
people
between the ages of 7-14 and 25-35. Starting at around 10% and 5% respectively, both numbers continued to grow over the measurement period to
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reach 30% in 2011.
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