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The three pie charts illustrate the amount of hours spent by undergraduates and postgraduates in comparison with a total student population in the British University library.

The three pie charts illustrate the amount of hours spent by undergraduates and postgraduates in comparison with a total student population in the British University library.
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The three pie charts illustrate the
amount
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 of
hours
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 spent by undergraduates and postgraduates in comparison with
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the
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 total student population in the British University
library
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, a large proportion of undergraduate
students
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 spend between one and seven
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 in
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library
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the library
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 in comparison with postgraduate
students
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. The figures were 63
percent
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per cent
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 and seventeen per cent respectively.
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, only nine per cents of undergraduate
students
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 spent at least 16
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 in the
library
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,
whereas
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 the postgraduate
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students
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 average in
this
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 category is 51 per cent , which is just over a half. Meanwhile, for
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the total
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 student population, the pattern appears to be slightly different. Exactly half of them spend 8 or more
hours
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 in
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library
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the library
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. But out of the total fifteen per cent read sixteen or more. Which is almost a third of the corresponding figure for postgraduate
students
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It is clear that
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 postgraduate
students
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 spend more time in the British University
library
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 than either undergraduates or other
students
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, library, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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