The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories. The table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories. The table shows the percentage change in each category or exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The given chart highlights information about the amount of wealth which was earned by one territory in a diversity of fields and the table
also
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illustrates data about the portions of altered value regarding each
exports
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export
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in 2016 compared with 2015.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
the
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petroleum products
was
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were
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the head item on the list in both mentioned years which bring big money
while
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the
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textiles
was
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were
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the
last
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port at which point it made a small array of cash. Looking at the details, around 60$
billion
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were earned by
the
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petroleum products in 2015 and
it
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which
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saw a 3% increase in 2016 and reached 63$
billion
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in the first year
and
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it improved
approximately
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by approximately
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eight
percentages
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per cent
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in 2016.
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, the Gems and jewellery category was ranked third with over forty
billion
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dollars in 2015 but
unfortunately
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it dropped to 40 in the following year and became the only port with 5.18% degradation. The next one was the
agrucultural
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agricultural
products with a similar amount, 31 in 2015 and 32 in 2016 ;
therefore
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, it enhanced only 0,81%.
Finally
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, the
textilles
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textiles
was the
last
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one with 25
billion
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dollars in 2015 but interestingly it became the only item with a high growth
with
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of
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15,24% during a period and reached over 31 in 2016.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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