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Some people think only best students should be rewarded. Others think we should reward students who make progress. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that the top
students
 are the only ones that could be rewarded
while
 others argue that
students
 with
changes
 should
also
 be given a reward. In my opinion, those
students
 that have big
changes
 could be given rewards because they are better influenced by other
students
. In institutions, it is commonly done that only the top
students
 are given rewards because of their intelligence. These
students
 have extremely prioritised improvement which they deserve to be acknowledged.
Besides
, the knowledge and skills they have acquired will not benefit the school but most especially the
students
 which could set off their life and careers. It will be their gateway to achieve their dreams and obtain a better quality of life. In my opinion, I believe that not only the best
students
 should have rewarded because sometimes these
students
 have a better grasp on life than other
students
. On the one hand,
students
 that make an improvement should
also
 be given a reward because they could be a better inspiration to other people.
For instance
, they were
students
 that does not excel in their classes but
due to
 the support of teachers, they were able to keep up and improve. Rewarding these
students
 might help boost their confidence to study more and might
also
 influence other
students
. These
students
 that experienced big
changes
 are better at influencing other individuals because they could use their experiences to inspire them. I do think that
students
 that had big
changes
 could have a reward because they could make a better impact on other
students
. In conclusion, top
students
 will always have rewards because they are more intelligent
however
, I do think that
students
 who progress are better at influencing their fellow
students
 to study and improve.
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