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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The given data illustrates the
amount
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 spent on Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 in the years 1999 and 2004 in five different nations in Europe. A quick glance at these tables reveals that there was a rise in the
sales
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 volume of
coffee
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 in each country,
whereas
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 there were only three out of five countries that saw an increase in the
sales
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amount
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 of
bananas
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.
Overall
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, the UK had the highest spending
amount
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 on both two products. Looking at the details about
sales
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 of
coffee
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, Switzerland's figure was highest in 1999, at 3
million
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 Euros,
then
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 doubled in 2004.
However
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, from 1.5
million
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 in 1999,
sales
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 in the UK saw a skyrocket in 2004, to 20
million
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,
thus
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, ranking first in terms of
coffee
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sales
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. In terms of the figure for banana
sales
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, the UK managed to maintain its position as the country with the highest spending
amount
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 on
bananas
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, at 15
million
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 in 1999 and 47
million
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 in 2004.
While
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 Switzerland and Denmark both had a fair increase, from 1
million
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 to 5.5
million
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, and from 0.6
million
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 to 4
million
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 respectively, there was a slight decline in the
sales
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 performance of
bananas
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 in Belgium and Sweden.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, coffee, bananas, sales, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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