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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? With the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#help #technology #students #information #support
It is undeniable that technology has changed human life globally. Some people consider that with the modern
devices
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students
 can learn more
information
 and earn it more rapidly. In
this
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 I will discuss
this
 issue and will include my own opinion.
First,
before learners spent hours at
library
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the library
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 to find any
information
 they need,
however
 nowadays just one click they can solve
this
 problem.
For instance
, every student can pick data from Google and Wikipedia without going out.
Moreover
,
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most youngster work after university and they hardly find time for preparing
to
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 lessons.
Furthermore
, cutting-edge gadgets provide learners
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 access online courses. Many
students
 do not afford to go offline courses,
this
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because most of them are expensive or in other countries. Modern equipment helps the young solve these matters.
For example
, if
student
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a student
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want
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 to learn more about his major subject can use scientific applications. Turning to the other side of the argument, there are disadvantages
of
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to
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 using state-of-art tools. There
are
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is
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variety
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a variety
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 of
information
 on
internet
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the internet
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 and
the
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most of them
not
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are not
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 reliable.
Student
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 should be
ability
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 to divide if
information
true
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is true
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 or false.
Besides
, there are many advertisements and entertaining data during searching on
internet
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the internet
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 they should manage their time.
To sum
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 all
above mentioned
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 points I think advanced tools help
students
 to be more successful.
Moreover
, modern gadgets can distract learners.
Students
 should carefully choose
informantion
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information
.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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