The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about the
percentages
of regular physical activity in both genders in the year 2010.
Overall
, male
experienced a downward trend, Fix the agreement mistake
males
while
female
showed an upward trend Fix the agreement mistake
females
troughout
the period of Correct your spelling
throughout
age
. Both gender's
rates had some fluctuations trend. Fix the agreement mistake
genders'
Although
male
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males
initialy
had Correct your spelling
initially
a higher
Correct the article-noun agreement
a higher percentage
higher percentages
percentages
of ages, however
it outraced females Add the comma(s)
,however
at the end
of the period.
Males
regular physical activity at the Change noun form
Males'
Male's
age
15
to 24 was about 52.8%, being higher than Change preposition
of 15
female
rate by approximately 5%. Add an article
the female
Then
, it decreased to almost 10.6% at the age
25 to 34 and continue to decrease to 39.5% at the youth 35 to 44. Then
the percetages
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percentage
percentages
increasing
steadily until the end of Wrong verb form
increases
age
, reaching around 43.1% at the maturity Add an article
the age
45
to 54, 45.1% at the maturity Change preposition
of 45
55
to 64, and hitting a higher point up about 46.7% in old Change preposition
of 55
age
65 and over.
Females gender
in the youth 15 to 24 was 47.7%, having a fewer percentages
than the Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
male's
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male
gender
. Then
, the percentages
increased steadily at the age
25 to 34 and 35 to 44, it was 48.9% to 52.5%. After that, the figure experienced Fix the agreement mistake
ages
a
steady growth during the next Remove the article
apply
age
45 to 64, and decreased to 47.1%, in the end
females Add the comma(s)
,end
gender
outracing the male percentages
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