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The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
 line chart detects the
number
 of international
students
 enrolment in the Desalle U University Site between 1980 and 2020. It is clear from the graph that Iran
students
 have the highest
number
 in 2009.
According to
 what is shown Greek decreased in 2005 from 180 people to less than 160 in 2006, but there was
an other
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 decline in 2007 to
be
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less than 80
student
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students
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, and there was a fall
to
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 the next years to
be
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less than 30
person
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people
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 in 2009.
However
, Turkey
students
 have a shiny grew from 2005 to 2007 with numbers from 20 to about 90 but after that started to be stable.
Lastly
, Iran
students
 have
a
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varied growth with a stable
increased
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 between 2006 and 2008, but there was a high
grew
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growth
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 in 2009 to be the highest
number
 of
the
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students
 in
this
 period with 160
person
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people
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.
To sum up
, we could say that the
number
 of Greek
students
 decline all over, but Iran and Turkey
students
 had grown in all the years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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