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Some people say that the aim of university education is to get good job in the future ,however others think that it benefits both graduates and companies . discuss both views and give your opinion

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In my opinion, It's better to finish at least any
course
 that you intended to so that you can have a good foundation for your coming job opportunities in the future.
Therefore
, citizens should go to any schools that they wanted to enrol to choose and have a
course
that is
 relevant to their working opportunities,It may help them to start a basic open their naked minds to what type and how they deal with their coming
course
,
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Since they should finish the whole allotted years of
this
course
 by theory and skills and knowledge guided by their mentor.
Although
, their some pressure because some of the company looking and choosing them as where they are graduated but in the
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end
while
 doing an interview still the Human resource management will decide if they will open the newbie to get hired and to be a part of them. In Sum up,No matter where they graduated from a University or College as long as they have a good pillar a strong background of knowledge and skills gained in
such
 a school where they graduated it will not be hard for them to compete with others.
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