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The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.

The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.
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The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.
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, it can be clearly observed that the statistics of all phone conversation types had
a huge intervals
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a huge interval
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in-between
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in between
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.
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, the utilization of mobiles grew gradually,
while
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 local, national and international call lines were having an unstable development. The local-fixed line was starting off with more than 70
billion
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, and the peak point
occured
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occurred
 in 1999 reaching 90
billion
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.
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, in 2002 returned to
the
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a
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 similar spot of a little over
than
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apply
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70
billion
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. In comparison with
this
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, national and international-fixed line outset with nearly 40
billion
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, and ended up with 60
billion
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 phone calls. Turning to the details, mobile calls which began at zero eventually finished with approximately 45
billion
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 in the year 2002, which appears to be a really good index
if
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is
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 to look at where it all kicked off.
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