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Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#governments #effort #alternative #sources #energy
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Nowadays, there are already limited sources of
energy
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 in the world. It said to be that humans have consumed and wasted all of it. Some people say that
government
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 should act on it on behalf of us. In my opinion,
government
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 is
very
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 crucial part of sourcing alternative
energy
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. The main reason why the
government
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 should look for alternative sources of
energy
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 is
because
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 it is starting to get scarce.
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Government
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The government
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 could advertise different ways of saving
energy
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to
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 each and every household.
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, thru advertisements, people would be able to know how they could use different ways to have and save
energy
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.
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, finding
other source
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another source
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 of
energy
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 could limit
the
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pollution. It is known that the current way of having
energy
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 is very detrimental to the environment.
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, locating oil in the sea could lead to
oil
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an oil
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 spill or fire that has
dangerous
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a dangerous
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 effect
to
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 our ozone layer.
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, instigating other plans for sourcing
energy
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 is very beneficial not just for us humans but
also
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 for the environment. It is the
government
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's responsibility to their constituents to locate other ways of having
energy
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 like thru windmills or by water current. As long as we the citizens are helping and supporting our
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energy
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 sourcing would be easy and helpful.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spearheading
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • transitioning
  • economic implications
  • government policies
  • research and development
  • national energy security
  • public-private sector collaboration
  • diversifying
  • environmental impact
  • clean energy
  • industry growth
  • dependence on imported fuels
  • alternative sources
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