The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart below displays the percentage of two genders who are
school’s
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students
studied
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who studied
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a foreign
language
at 14 to 16 years in an
English speaking
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country and the top three popular new
language
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their
like
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to study in 1984 and 2007.
Overall
, it is obvious that more girls have
passion
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a passion
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to learn new languages than boys in all survey years.
Also
, French was the most popular
language
that
students
would like to study compared with another two languages. In 1984, there were around 50
percent
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of
females
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female
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students
learned
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who learned
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a foreign
language
contracted with 30
percent
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of males. After
that
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all numbers decreased dramatically in 2007, 40
percent
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per cent
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of girls studied
new
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a new
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language
.
In contrast
, approximately 25
percent
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of boys study another
language
.
On the other hand
, the most famous
language
for
students
learning was French, reaching 50
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compared with 20
percent
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of German and under 10
percent
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of Spanish in 1984. In 2007, the figure
of
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people who studied French declined suddenly, peaking
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at
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around 25
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and the percentage of
students
learned
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German decreased low than 15
percent
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per cent
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.
However
, the number of
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the person
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person
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people
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who learned Spanish
growth
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to 10
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • modern foreign languages
  • English-speaking country
  • demographic
  • participation
  • gender disparities
  • trends
  • popularity rankings
  • analyzing
  • implications
  • cultural factors
  • economic ties
  • global job market
  • increasingly globalized
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