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Some think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. To what extend do you agree and disagree with this opinion?

#think #people #work
The performance in many
caases
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cases
causes
 can just be evaluated in terms of
sells
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sales
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 or manufacture but the teachers are exclusionary . in
this
 condition.
In sellers
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Sellers
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,
for instance
 , sell various products and
also
 they get wage only for
this
 .
However
, in my
opinion
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,opinion
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 each seller or
producers
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producer
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 should take
extra
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an extra
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 salary for their extra work.
In
addition
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,addition
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 they will have to be motivated and
encourage
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encouraged
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 by their manager
that
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which
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 can be helpful for their character and another way to increase their salary
to
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is to
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 pay them based on how much they produce or sell. To tell the
truth
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,truth
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this
 is
also
remarkable
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a remarkable
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 condition. For before any
mangers
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managers
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 have not paid the wages by
this
 way.
On the other
hand
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,hand
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 the
employess
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employees
 will attempt to work overtime to acquire extra earnings and
that is
outstanding
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an outstanding
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 method for
accure
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acquire
accurate
 their money.
Moreover
, the company which is
utilized
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utilising
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 the workers may be raised its status among the cities. Some
many
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may
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 argue that difficult to use
this
 method because the products may be damaged by
hurricane
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hurricanes
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 or rain,
the
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and the
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 employees have to
responsible
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be responsible
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 for any damages or the
ensuins
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ensuing
 drop in
the products rates
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the rates of the products
the rates of the product
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. Basing wages or production rates would actually demotivate workers in
such
 states. In conclusion, I think
decing
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deciding
decking
 how much an employee should earn based solely on their sales or production figures will be fair in most cases and
also
 I prefer to choose
this
 method
that is
 profitable per employee.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • motivate
  • encourage
  • productivity
  • performance-based pay
  • objective assessment
  • collaboration
  • creativity
  • innovation
  • stress
  • burnout
  • job satisfaction
  • compensation strategy
  • quantify
  • supportive work environment
  • professional development
  • recognition programs
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