some young people like to copy the behaviour and clothes of famous people today? why might this be the case? what problem can it cause?

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of students. Youth
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20% more food with a
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content with respect to
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consumes 17% more
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at all.
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of overweight children
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role models
  • aspire
  • influenced by
  • lifestyle
  • fashion choices
  • social media
  • visibility
  • accessible
  • desirable
  • followers
  • endorsements
  • marketing campaigns
  • trendsetters
  • peer pressure
  • conformity
  • emulate
  • experiment
  • identity
  • express themselves
  • admire
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