The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.

The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.
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The line chart illustrates that the Tourist Information office did questionnaires in person, by letter/email and by telephone in a city from January to June 2011.
Overall
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, January saw an increasing trend by individuals and by telephone,
while
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this
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by letter or email remained the same in the first three months,
then
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it dropped to the lowest in May and remained the same level the next
month
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. During the first
month
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of 2011, the survey by phone was the highest with about 900, compared to the figure by letter or email with just a bit lower 800 and in person about 400. The number in person increased dramatically until the middle of March when reaching the highest among these three ways.
This
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figure was about 1900 in June.
By contrast
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, the number by telephone dropped about 100 during the first
month
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when it increased largely to 900 in June.
Although
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the number means of letters/emails stayed the same from January to March, it decreased about two times until May when it stayed the same the next
month
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words month with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Questionnaire
  • Tourist Information Office
  • Individual submission
  • Letter/email communication
  • Telephone survey
  • Fluctuation
  • Stable trend
  • Gradual increase
  • Varied patterns
  • Surpassed
  • Significant rise
  • Seasonal peak
  • Tourist behavior
  • Information campaign
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