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many people these days change careers throughout their working life.What are the main reasons for it? Is it a positive or negative development for them personally and for the society as a whole?

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Nowadays, people are constantly changing their
career
 pathways because of some reasons.
However
, it has both pros and cons to themselves and to the society. First of all, not all people who graduated
from
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 a specific college degree will practice their profession based on what course they pursued.
For instance
, a graduate
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 a Pharmacy degree may not work in the field of Pharmacy for the rest of their lives for a few reasons
such
 as lack of job vacancies, low salary offers, and
also
 lack of
career
 growth opportunities. It might be the same with other professionals, who
also
 change their
career
pathway
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.
However
, there are both advantages and disadvantages
of
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 not staying in your
career
 path. One of the advantages is people may find contentment
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 other types of jobs.
In addition
 to
this
, they might have better opportunities to explore
other
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another career
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career
 which may lead to
career
 advancement. But, the disadvantages are in certain fields, we may be lacking professionals. A great example of
this
 is when healthcare workers are trying to find alternative jobs like working in call
centers
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 and other non-medical related jobs.
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 of healthcare professionals
practicing
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 their professions may have a negative impact
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society. In conclusion to
this
, there are both negative and positive impacts of changing
career
 pathways.
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